Night Heart

An almost prophetic sounding poem, who knows I may write the story to go with it at some point.

Down path long and old,

Low Night Heart will stride,

Through fell winter cold,

Cross frozen sea glide.

To the mountain tall,

The grand hidden lair,

“Beast” Night Heart must call,

Into its eyes glare.

Slay the dragon great,

The fiend’s hell fire braved,

Death’s thirst it shall sate,

Night Heart’s soul is saved.

Hope you enjoy, please comment.

The Lonely Recluse.

                                                 


Thanks to Jingle for the Perfect Poet Award for week 37

http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.wordpress.com/2011/01/16/the-perfect-poet-award-4-poets-rally-week-37/

My nomination for week 38 is Linda – http://absolutepalaver.wordpress.com/

The Lonely Recluse.

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~ by The Lonely Recluse on January 12, 2011.

52 Responses to “Night Heart”

  1. powerful writing..

    Appreciate your coming in…
    Happy Rally.

    attitude is everything.
    😉

  2. your rhyme is superb and the story is beautiful. happy poets rally!!!

    http://magicinthebackyard.wordpress.com/2010/09/27/on-a-bed-of-winter/

  3. Night Heart will be an excellent hero. Great poem. Thanks for sharing.

    • Glad you like the idea of Night Heart, just need to finish Fael’s 3 a.m. story and work out Night Heart’s character and I’ll try bring him to life for you. Glad you enjoyed the poem.
      The Lonely Recluse.

  4. Like others, I imagined a hero in an epic saga upon reading this work. Thank you for sharing it.

  5. What a beautiful journey. I had wonderful images in my head.

  6. Indeed this is an epic write…like a greek odyssey…enjoyed it and can’t wait for the story (if you decide to write it).

  7. A perfect rhyme and content in this smoothly flowing poem…Thanks for sharing. 🙂

  8. Feel like this is a poem about overcoming. Well done!

  9. wow! here’s mine for this thursday.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/02/19/the-tears/

  10. An amazing journey, beautifully written. Love it!

  11. Perfect rhyme and words..

  12. It does feel like a piece to a whole, but as a piece it is strong and vivid.

    Happy Rally
    http://mysticmarleei.wordpress.com/2011/01/13/dependent/

  13. This would create a good story!
    I enjoyed the flow of the words.

  14. A lovely poem…

  15. an unbeatable warrior…beautiful and powerful 🙂

  16. Oh yes! Beowulf! -rallypoet-

  17. Is it wrong I feel sorry for the dragon? It feels like time has dwindled down the full tale. I’d love to hear it spun as bard would. Nicely done!

    • Feel as you wish, t’is the beauty of poetry. When I write the prose to accompany this (sadly I doubt I’d be able to write full epic verse like the bards of old) I’ll probably make the dragon more wyrm like than draco like (i.e. more of a mindless killing beast than a noble intelligent beast). Glad you enjoyed it though.
      The Lonely Recluse.

  18. You have set the stage! And thank you for the reference to rhymezone!

  19. Different style…quite interesting. Happy rally! 🙂

  20. congrats to you on your perfect poet award week 37… 🙂

  21. Different but nice..
    http://loveamongotherthings.wordpress.com/

  22. I admire your rhyme scheme. alot.
    Intriguing story too you have.

    Love and Light

    • Funnily enough I prefer my usual AABB style rhyme scheme over this ABAB style, but I’m glad you admire it. a lot. I hope I can write prose to match the comments this verse has raised. Peace and Joy to you.
      The Lonely Recluse.

  23. A Gothic kind of fascinating darkness!

  24. Feels like the beginning of a great epic.

    JP

    http://tasithoughts.wordpress.com/2011/01/13/pieces/

  25. Happy Tuesday, return favor to those poets who are here yet you did not reach them initially…
    I am saying these to all poets, hope that you take it rationally…
    thanks for the support.

    • Fair point Jingle, your comment is taken as it is meant. I have attempted to make sure I do reply to anyone who comments on my blog, by both replying to their comment and commenting on their own blog. Thanks for all the hard work.
      The Lonely Recluse.

  26. Beautiful story told in such wonderful words.. 🙂 Thank you..!!
    Love xxxx

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