The Phoenix

A poem written for the madwords contest #1 entitled Creation – [link] -. We had to write a poem about some form of creation whith a few essential words being off limit. This is my take on creation, a wombless birth, the creation of a phoenix

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Flames Burning
Ashes Churning
Consuming
.
Flesh Melting
Bones Rending
Levelling
.
Flames Healing
Ashes Sealing
Sweetening
.
The Phoenix
Awakes

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Thanks for reading, please feel free to comment.

The Lonely Recluse.

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~ by The Lonely Recluse on September 14, 2011.

8 Responses to “The Phoenix”

  1. Simply words..yet you have weaved the birth so beautifully.
    Nice work as always..

    Keep writing..!

  2. Brilliant! Though I havent really seen an actual phoenix but I do feel the re-birth after the ‘trials’
    Was amazed by the repetition of first and third stanza with the variation in choice of words – apt and evokes a totally different feeling.
    Well-done again!

    • No one has ever seen an actual phoenix, they’re mythical fire birds. The use of fire was the reason I chose the phoenix to be the theme, I love how fire can be both healing and destroying. It cleanses yet can dirty. It is feared and loved. Thank you for the comment, glad you enjoyed it.
      The Lonely Recluse.

  3. vivid and dynamic words, love the verbs when they are given actions and present tenses.

    cheers.

    you can still join poets rally week 52 if you wish, we are open until Friday.

    • Glad you enjoyed it, sadly going to have to sit out of the rallys and such like for a couple of weeks, life’s changing and I can’t take extra commitment, sorry.
      The Lonely Recluse.

  4. Again, it’s almost like you wrote these pieces tonight directly for me. It was the quirk in the last link that resonated with my own sense, and here, my favorite of all the mythical creatures. Really a nice job with the Phoenix, both the creature and the metaphor. Thanks

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