Open Your Eyes

Frank over a Dverse has challenged us to write a septet, a seven line poem, drawing to mind the perfection of that number. I felt I would make things a bit harder for myself, 7 line of 7 syllables must surely be more perfect. Go check out other people’s approaches to this prompt https://dversepoets.com/2020/04/09/the-perfect-seven-lines/

The only problem was I didn’t have a clue where to start. The muse was not playing ball for writing from scratch. So I opened a rather dusty folder on my pc, the folder that unfinished poems get relegated to, never to be finished. I opened the first title that looked interesting, (dated 24th October 2012) and found the first two lines of this poem (in a slightly different form). They seemed so fitting for everything that’s going on at the moment. The human world holds its breath, yet the birdsong is the loudest I can remember it. Anyway, on to the poem

If your eyes see what’s around
Beauty and wonder are found
In the tree and in the bush
Cooing dove and singing thrush
The world is so full of life
Despite the chaos and strife
There is hope still to be found

Hope you enjoy, please feel free to comment
The Lonely Recluse

~ by The Lonely Recluse on April 9, 2020.

24 Responses to “Open Your Eyes”

  1. There is beauty all around us this spring. Very nice seven line poem and very optimistic. It is good to keep those old poems. You never know when they come in handy.

    I also like the additional constraint of 7 syllables per line. That makes it doubly perfect. Seven lines down and seven syllables across.

    • I can’t believe how beautiful it has been here in Wales, getting tanned from doing the gardening, shame I can’t be in the hills instead.
      I tried to think of a third 7, but my muse was being fickle enough without that extra effort. Thanks for the comment
      The Lonely Recluse

  2. Yes, “the world is full of life”, but unfortunately, Covid-19 is now part of that life swirling around us.

    • Death has always been a part of life, we have just been more complacent bout it in the past 100 years or so. While it’d be daft to ignore all the measures been taken to protect everyone. we can get so blinded by the chaos that we fail to see the beauty. Thanks for the comment.
      The Lonely Recluse

  3. If we only open our eyes we see the world continues as normal… Hope lies in this passing too!

  4. In these times, extra effort needs to be made to make sure the eyes land on the good stuff amongst all of that other stuff. Your poem celebrates the good stuff very well.

  5. Great last line! Hope is there if you look for it.

    • There is always hope, humanity has been through worse and survived in the past, and often learnt from times of great trouble. Hopefully we learn from this time in lockdown. Thanks for the comment.
      The Lonely Recluse

  6. I hope that this lockdown is over by next spring (!) – but I also hope that i remember how good it is to slow dwon and pay attention to the world around me. I’ve never spent so much time listening to the birds or looking at flowers. This sums up my world at th emoment.

    • It sounds like we are living in similar worlds. It’d be nice to believe that we could keep the slowed down world once the lockdown is over, but something makes me think we’ll go back to being headless chickens. Thanks for the comment.
      The Lonely Recluse

  7. hope still… hang on to it.

  8. Lovely reminder to head out of doors, put away the fear, and listen!

    • While maintaining proper social distancing, of course =P. But yes, even sat with my back door open I can hear the birds singing away beautifully. Thanks for the comment.
      The Lonely Recluse

  9. I enjoyed the rhyming flow and there is still hope to be found.

  10. This self-isolation has many taking time to enjoy the little things of nature. May they not forget them when this is over.

  11. Wonderfully positive!

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