Smash

So dVerse is celebrating its 8th anniversary, and Brian has invited folk to write a poem that captures a moment, here’s my take on the prompt. Go check out what moment others have chosen to capture https://dversepoets.com/2020/07/14/dverse-poetics-8th-year-anniversary/

For a fragment of a second
Milliseconds stand as hours
The world stands still
As realisation dawns
That nothing can be done
And everything
Tips
And

Falls

 
Down

 

Down

 

 

Down
Smash
There goes my favourite glass

Hope you enjoy, please feel free to comment
The Lonely Recluse

~ by The Lonely Recluse on July 14, 2020.

18 Responses to “Smash”

  1. Ha. how many times have i stood in that moment, watching the train as it is about to wreck, or the glass as it falls, or a slide tackle about to snap a leg. The world definitely slows down in those moments and everything is clear, as if that is the last gift before the shattering…

    brian

  2. Heh, this is very witty and well crafted. Sorry you lost your favorite – I hope you found a new one since. 🙂

  3. Yes, what is built can be demolished, what is breakable can be broken. Shit happens, then we write about it.

  4. I love the theme of time in this poem. I love how it’s also referenced at the end with the glass breaking. It’s probably not the main theme here, but I like its possible connection to the reversal of time. Time goes on, never to reverse, and we just have the memories as they are. These were just my thoughts on this wonderful, thought-provoking poem. What a beauty.

  5. That is a very real feeling. The feeling of being out of control is very unsettling! Well done!

  6. Ack! I hate when that happens. I held my breath to find out what was falling. Thankfully, not the poles, or a mountainside. Smiles.

  7. That moment before the glass crashes could also be a metaphor for something even more important being lost

    • Yes, yes that is exactly what I meant, honest I’m that clever, honest (put more truthfully, your suggestion is far better than my original intention, therefore I’m stealing your idea =P ) Thanks for the comment

  8. I like the way you evoke slow motion in this poem through its shape and form, and describing the time it takes, not the actual smash until the very end.

  9. Great captured moment.

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